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You (God) and Me


Author: Ramneet
ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
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In this poem I have described an ideal relationship between God and a human being.


You (God) and Me


You (God) and Me
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My mind, body and soul is Your's.
You are absorbed in me
and I am absorbed in You.
Such is the love between me and You.





Submitted on 2013-01-04 13:56:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  So short and very sweet.
| Posted on 2013-05-22 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  absorbed and dissolved and consumed by my God. Oh yes!
| Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
  it should end in you

"Such is the love between me and You."

not "me and you"
| Posted on 2013-01-06 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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