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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Rundots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMidnight Rundots
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    Parents left,
    This is my chance.
    I ran out the house,
    Without a second glance.

    I kept running.
    I'm not wearing shoes.
    I feel ground.
    Something I don't ever do.

    It's cold outside.
    No jacket on me.
    I don't care.
    I continue to flee.

    I arrive at the park,
    The local soccer field.
    I take a deep breath.
    My eyes sealed.

    I walk out in the open,
    A cool sensation.
    I lie in the grass,
    In the sweet condensation.

    The curtain of fog
    Opens, revealing stars.
    They never change,
    No matter where you are.

    Whether its a new location,
    Or new state of mind.
    Theyre always constant,
    The warm, comforting kind.

    I lie there for a while,
    Just me and the sky.
    I exhale clouds,
    Watching them float by.

    It was getting late,
    Began to feel alone,
    I stood up,
    And ran back home.




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    | Posted on 2013-01-06 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very nice, the imagery was wonderful- I really enjoyed this
    | Posted on 2013-01-05 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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