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    dots Submission Name: Abandondots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAbandondots
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                    The moon tonight is a great white lie
                    Floating high in a blue black sky
                    We will dance anyway
                    What care we for deceit on high
                    Throw back your head with me
                    And howl
                    Let your hair
                    Whip and fly
                    Our cheeks flame with the exalted
                    Power of the game
                    Are those drums that pound
                    Or our hearts that thump in fits
                    And starts
                    We are ravaged by love
                    But savage as we are
                    Beneath
                    The cold light of stars
                    The moon cannot deny the tenderness
                    In my forever eyes




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    ||| Comments |||
      Ooh I like the opening line so much I wish I had thought of it. And in its great white lie, even it cannot deny your tenderness. I love the forever eyes. Very romantic, Dale.
    She's a lucky gal. ;)
    | Posted on 2013-01-12 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      a tribute to the hopeful cynic
    whose love mocks as it hopes to mimic
    all the world's passion in a floating orb
    like sweet dreams of perfection
    even he can't ignore...
    | Posted on 2013-01-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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