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    dots Submission Name: sweet little thingdots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    they see me and and think im such a sweet little thing/
    but i have done things that i keep well hidden within/
    i keep a smile on the outside for everyone to see/
    but they will never get to know the real me./
    i can talk for hours become your best friend/
    but all will become clear at the very end./
    i can dress up or down, i could suit you/
    be that something borrowed, blue, old or new./
    keep track of the time, when im with you it could slip,/
    you wanna taste of what im living like, here take a sip./
    im in total control, i have the remote/
    to keep up with me you better take notes/
    i can tear people down, or build them up high/
    but to take over me, you wouldnt dare try!




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    this is very good.
    | Posted on 2013-01-12 00:00:00 | by ShameirE | [ Reply to This ]


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