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looking over you

Author: secret kisses
ASL Info:    22/f/uk
Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558 /438 /138
Words: 166
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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looking over you

looking over you

please dont shed a tear for me,
dont think that i have gone.
i am here looking over you,
my spirit still lives on.

i may have been young,
and you think it wasnt my time.
but things happens for a reason,
and this time the time was mine.

please cherish all the memories,
as i always have and will.
remember all the laughs and smiles,
and carry them on still.

i will be watching over you,
and help guide you along the way.
anytime you need to talk or cry,
i will be here for you everyday.

just because you cant hear or see me,
dont think im not around.
i will be in every living flower and gusty wind,
and in every pebble on the ground.

so let this be your last tear for me,
dont think that i have gone.
im here forever looking over you,
through you my spirit lives on.

Submitted on 2013-01-07 03:54:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2013-01-12 00:00:00 | by ShameirE | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a beautiful piece that sent shivers down my spine. Is it written from the point of view of someone you know who passed away? It evokes all the feelings of sadness and regret perfectly. The only thing I can think of to critique is that the rhyme stumbled in places, but other than that I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-01-07 00:00:00 | by Rebecca7943 | [ Reply to This ]

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