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    dots Submission Name: silence the voicedots

    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 204/205/140
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       wild imaginations

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    dotssilence the voicedots

    Looking down, feel the red shame
    The way you do it again and again
    But, this time my heart's closed
    Like a clam in the hulls don't you know
    Heart burn fierce, you try your charm
    Do you know how it feels?

    almost went that path again
    the fool looking up not knowing how or when
    they each have their script where I believe
    the evidence takes me south
    can you believe?
    how hard they try
    wonder why?
    don't care and silhouette with lies that
    paranoia's setting in
    pathetic aims so scrupulous
    let's play along
    the lead no choice
    the main goal is to silence the voice

    the weak subscribe
    they need this tribe
    heated hate
    exclude the bait
    will blind so bright
    they bind inside their envy minds

    but, do go on keep on dreaming
    the delusions that could ruin a heart
    now there is fusion is a small box
    won't you join the doubtful crowd

    now evolved and steps ahead
    they loathe and feel a part of men
    that pounce and drink to follow
    justify your comfort zone tomorrow
    they hate the foolish one with dreams
    so far above these heathen deeds

    fathom wish
    you'll never know
    mere minds of ordinary foes

    make a sport and take my gold
    eyes open and headstrong
    breed the hatred
    buy the dust that blinds the worn

    they come inside
    pretend to be
    some kind of ally
    that deceive
    leaving haste and secret traps
    itchy dusted gifts of wrath
    spies that try so hard to make me sad

    the locks are tight
    the chains they hang
    upon my soul
    the heavy hands
    Alas! astonish all the enemy
    Escape the deep
    Houdini grace then go free
    This declared my liberty!
    11th hour when death tempts
    Angel wings triumphant
    swim away sweet fish
    and live

    Submitted on 2013-01-07 22:37:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Abstract, and what a great read. The flow is excellent, as it reads like a story. This makes it very easy to read and comprehend.

    Well done indeed.

    | Posted on 2013-01-10 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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