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    dots Submission Name: Morning With Youdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMorning With Youdots
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    I know you in the morning
    when your arms stretch out for me
    Your chest rises and falls
    my heart beats in a warm embrace, covered by your breath and the blanket that keeps us overnight

    I am yours here, in the morning
    As you roll over and your eyes say to me
    You dont want to get up

    We are cradled in these moments and doubt cannot penetrate

    Trials, we see them everyday
    But they are irrelevant
    in each others arms
    as we awaken with the dawn
    and the creases of sunlight come beaming in from the blinds
    to warm already warm desires




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      I like this, the way you express the life you live with another !!! Actually Good job here youve made me smile, I like them thoughts of wakeing up and haveing someone there, those are the best times in life is haveing that somebody there to wake up to, I hope you and yours have a beautiful life together, and cant wait to hear more of this love !!!

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me jealous, I guess I've been too long without a woman.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-01-10 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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