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    Author: quicksorrow
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 33/9/8
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The one thing still there
    out in the picture window
    that her fingers feel is stone
    as dead as the old man in vest
    drinking vodka in state of readiness
    to dive in hell.

    After years of lunch
    one afternoon she stopped
    ordering noodles
    I continue walking
    wave on some kids and shopkeepers
    it surprises me.

    Nights are difficult. Does she think I'm real?

    The one thing she still feels now
    is stone
    as hard as my dick.




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