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    dots Submission Name: Maybe I Can't Waitdots
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    Author: MmR
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsMaybe I Can't Waitdots
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    Maybe my eyes were too sober to comprehend.
    Maybe I should have never stopped drinking.
    Maybe I was foolish to see how far my soul would bend
    Before my mind was left alone with it's thinking.

    But goddamn if you didn't pound me like a drum
    And goddamn if you didn't set my heart on fire.
    Goddamn if you didn't make me smile that smile
    That revealed my body's aching desire...

    And honestly I can't wait to see you again






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      i feel like i can relate to this 100 percent. very passionate writing sarah. and hey it's okay if you need to fantasize about me ;) i know i'm a sexy hunk of man meat.
    | Posted on 2013-01-14 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      "Maybe I should have never stopped drinking."
    ^this

    :)
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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