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    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/34
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Tis the week before Christmas and every night
    As soon as the children are snuggled up tight
    And have sleepily murmured their wishes and prayers,
    Such fun as goes on in the parlour downstairs!
    For Father, Big Brother, and Grandfather too,
    Start in with great vigour their youth to renew.
    The Grown-ups are having great fun - all is well;
    And they play till it's long past their hour for bed.

    They try to solve puzzles and each one enjoys
    The magical thrill of mechanical toys,
    Even Mother must play with a doll that can talk,
    And if you assist it, it's able to walk.
    It's really no matter if paint may be scratched,
    Or a cogwheel, a nut, or a bolt gets detached;
    The grown-ups are having great fun - all is well;
    The children don't know it, and Santa won't tell.




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      lol well thanks ,i had gotten this poem qoekshopped and no one understood the true meaning of this poem
    | Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      haha..well it is the season to be jolly. Pretty screwed up for the kids, while those former kids (grown -UPS) are screwing around.. I love the dark aspect of this piece. Hohoho.Merry Christmas .:-P
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
      lol
    | Posted on 2013-01-14 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      Really? :D I was drunk the whole time, can't remember much...
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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