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    dots Submission Name: I've Been Theredots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsI've Been Theredots
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    I've Been There

    I've been there
    I've been down that road
    That endless road

    Did anyone care
    Not a single soul
    No one to share
    Left out in the cold

    Lived in fear
    Jumped out of my skin
    I've been there
    And came out with a grin...

    S.H.




    Submitted on 2013-01-13 12:31:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You must have hit a funny bone.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
       i love the ending !
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno, this poem is kinda too short and too closed to have a powerfull impact on the reader. Almost too personal I would say, for the reader to fully comprehend it. You need to be more descriptive if you're gonna name a poem that. Here, the same subject done right: http://youtu.be/L-bUSCM1WPE
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it has a happy ending even though the details are left to the imagination. :)
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by timepet | [ Reply to This ]


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