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    dots Submission Name: Travelsdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    This rude backdrop
    surrenders our embraces
    effaced anonymous
    no claim of dignity
    or thought.

    These hotel surfaces touched
    by a faceless many so
    intimate, and unidentified
    who knows, who cares,
    who slept and who blank-stared
    into blackness, but never
    to its full extent.

    Let this hard copious air
    my nostrils as I, offended,
    turn my telescope
    to other times in other places
    when someone would be,

    Submitted on 2013-01-15 03:44:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this gave me the feeling like I was drifting away in your mind and mine as well, like a story or something, but I like it enjoyed the write, very captureing, wished it could of been longer but over all good to read !!!

    | Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]

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