Travels

Author: expiring_touch ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173 Words: 79

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Travels

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(Airport) This rude backdrop surrenders our embraces effaced anonymous no claim of dignity – or thought. (Room) These hotel surfaces touched by a faceless many – so intimate, and unidentified – who knows, who cares, who slept and who blank-stared into blackness, but never to its full extent. (Home) Let this hard copious air hit my nostrils as I, offended, turn my telescope to other times in other places when someone would be, waiting.

Submitted on 2013-01-15 03:44:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wow, this gave me the feeling like I was drifting away in your mind and mine as well, like a story or something, but I like it enjoyed the write, very captureing, wished it could of been longer but over all good to read !!! theinforment

| Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]

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