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Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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This rude backdrop
surrenders our embraces
effaced anonymous
no claim of dignity –
or thought.

These hotel surfaces touched
by a faceless many – so
intimate, and unidentified –
who knows, who cares,
who slept and who blank-stared
into blackness, but never
to its full extent.

Let this hard copious air
my nostrils as I, offended,
turn my telescope
to other times in other places
when someone would be,

Submitted on 2013-01-15 03:44:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, this gave me the feeling like I was drifting away in your mind and mine as well, like a story or something, but I like it enjoyed the write, very captureing, wished it could of been longer but over all good to read !!!

| Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]

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