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    dots Submission Name: A Knife of Love or Lifedots

    Author: Cure
    ASL Info:    24/M/BakerCity, Or
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 26/23/15
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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        i wrote this on 10/01/2010 its was a quick, first attempt at a suicidal poem.lol here's a good description: i always viewed a suicidal thyme to a poem as a super saturated solution. like a pot of 1/3 sugar and 2/3 water it would require heat ant constant stirring. lol basically this is my first time ever attempting to make emo fudge...lmao if that makes sense. even if you dont like the poem tell me what you think of this analogy lol

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    dotsA Knife of Love or Lifedots

    My love, My life, My dear sweet wife.

    I sit here on this night with my heart and a knife.

    Thinking of all the pain and strife Iíve brought into our life.

    I would take my life with this here knife at the sight of your flight if you were to leave me tonight.

    I know Iím crazy my love and I know Iím the reason we fight. I know I was wrong and, yes damn it, youíre always right!

    I promise to be faithful and love you for the rest of my life if you could just be willing to give us one more try.

    I promise my love, I will try with all my might for the rest of my life to make my wrongs right.
    But, my dear sweet wife, until I have your forgiveness I refuse to put down this knifeÖ

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      I like the powerful emotion in this write, tells of the truth in the relationship and shows the devine love you have for this woman, any man can be ugly, but it takes courage and forgiveness to move on and make a better life, other then that man, the write it self is fuken badass to me, because you express and share about your life, thanks !!!

    hope all is well for you my friend remember to keep your head up and smile, cause that smile is worth millions to the one who appreciates it

    sincerly, theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-01-30 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      well that sucks. i don't think i've ever really been suicidal about a woman, but i'm pretty sure i've been close. i can't really offer that much but to say this was the much better option, and it's good to see writing being used for good reasons. hope you're not as depressed as you were then.
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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