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    dots Submission Name: Blood Oasisdots
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    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsBlood Oasisdots
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    holy fucking shivers
    Heads are flowing down the river bend
    Tired yet awake from the foul vile stench
    First I lost my sleep to this, patience growing thinner
    So repulsed by this cannibal waste, which robs me of my dinner
    Camping on the edging shores of the Nile river




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      This has personality to it, something about the shortness combined with the strong language gives this piece a unique voice.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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