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    dots Submission Name: Blood Oasisdots
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    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 541
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    dotsBlood Oasisdots
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    holy fucking shivers
    Heads are flowing down the river bend
    Tired yet awake from the foul vile stench
    First I lost my sleep to this, patience growing thinner
    So repulsed by this cannibal waste, which robs me of my dinner
    Camping on the edging shores of the Nile river




    Submitted on 2013-01-15 20:01:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has personality to it, something about the shortness combined with the strong language gives this piece a unique voice.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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