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Blood Oasis

Author: Damien Vladimir
ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122 /89 /35
Words: 51
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Blood Oasis

holy fucking shivers
Heads are flowing down the river bend
Tired yet awake from the foul vile stench
First I lost my sleep to this, patience growing thinner
So repulsed by this cannibal waste, which robs me of my dinner
Camping on the edging shores of the Nile river

Submitted on 2013-01-15 20:01:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This has personality to it, something about the shortness combined with the strong language gives this piece a unique voice.

Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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