Blood Oasis by Damien Vladimir

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Author:	Damien Vladimir
ASL Info:	28/m/hollywood/Ca
Elite Ratio:	3.84 - 122/89/35
Words:	51

Class/Type:	Poetry/Nature
Total Views:	534
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Blood Oasis dots

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holy fucking shivers
Heads are flowing down the river bend
Tired yet awake from the foul vile stench
First I lost my sleep to this, patience growing thinner
So repulsed by this cannibal waste, which robs me of my dinner
Camping on the edging shores of the Nile river

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This has personality to it, something about the shortness combined with the strong language gives this piece a unique voice.

Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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