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    dots Submission Name: My flamedots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 451
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1224



    Description:
       This is a piece about..... somebody.
    Somebody very special to me......



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    dotsMy flamedots
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    She lives inside of me
    Whispering words into my mind
    A spoken insanity
    Unclouded and unspoiled by lies
    The open truth, she helps me see
    Between societies lines
    And a night without her words, to me
    Is like a minute,
    Frozen without time.

    I call her my flame
    My flame with emerald stars

    Sweet memories once known
    Are eclipsed within by tormented lives
    Yet still, she creates understanding
    Nonconforming? true, but wise
    She will take my mind and fantasy
    Weave their twistedness into words
    And when life has me beaten, and down for the count
    Inside my head she'll pick me up
    And gently bring me round

    I call her my flame
    My flame with emerald stars

    It is quiet inside me tonight
    Her voice sleeps sweetly, worlds away
    I sit and wait,
    Knowing that she will return with force
    Understanding that we shall never be alone
    As long as we each have the other inside
    An innocent love, truly blind.
    A mind,
    Within a mind

    Me, and my flame
    My flame with emerald eyes.




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      Holly shit dude, this is a fucken badass write here, I mean it is good when I was reading I was trying to grasp whats in your mind, but I couldnt, then I was trying to think of a relationship maybe but as I read on I knew it wasnt one, but this write has me thinking now !!! haha good job man, maybe the words of an dead lover or an dead family member IDK, but in the reality of the write. You have me inspired to write another piece, thanks

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm really getting moody now as this is the third really good poem of love I've read within the last few minutes. I'm looking at all this good stuff and it forces me to wonder if I will ever write anything worth while again, assuming I actually have.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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