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Submission Name:
dazzled
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Author:
DaleP
ASL Info:
57/M/TX
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6.21 - 629/553/330
Words:
62
Class/Type:
Poetry/Love
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dazzled
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I was lost when I saw your eyes
Then your smile stopped my heart
And my heart cried
“who is she?"
"I dare not beat again until I know.”
Now there is no ground
beneath my feet.
I do not care,
because with you I can fly.
Love is too small a word
for you and I.
Submitted on 2013-01-16 13:25:29
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nice man, good write good way to express that moment your heart captured,
theinforment
| Posted on 2013-01-23 00:00:00 | by
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I hate to assume anything but I get the feeling that you must be there to be able to express such. Good work once again.
Lloyd
| Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by
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