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Submission Name: dazzled dots

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Author:	DaleP
ASL Info:	57/M/TX
Elite Ratio:	6.21 - 630/554/330
Words:	62

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	744
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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dazzled

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                    I was lost when I saw your eyes
                    Then your smile stopped my heart
                    And my heart cried
                     “who is she?"

                    "I dare not beat again until I know.”

                    Now there is no ground
                    beneath my feet.
                    I do not care,
                    because with you I can fly.
                    Love is too small a word
                    for you and I.

Submitted on 2013-01-16 13:25:29 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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nice man, good write good way to express that moment your heart captured,

theinforment
| Posted on 2013-01-23 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
I hate to assume anything but I get the feeling that you must be there to be able to express such. Good work once again.

Lloyd
| Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.