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    dots Submission Name: dazzleddots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                        I was lost when I saw your eyes
                        Then your smile stopped my heart
                        And my heart cried
                         “who is she?"

                        "I dare not beat again until I know.”

                        Now there is no ground
                        beneath my feet.
                        I do not care,
                        because with you I can fly.
                        Love is too small a word
                        for you and I.




    Submitted on 2013-01-16 13:25:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       nice man, good write good way to express that moment your heart captured,

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-01-23 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate to assume anything but I get the feeling that you must be there to be able to express such. Good work once again.

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-01-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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