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    dots Submission Name: More Than A Boxdots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsMore Than A Boxdots
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    I am not a box,
    there are more than four sides to me.
    Although I can be filled
    or lie empty even still.
    I do not allow just anyone
    to throw their garbage within carelessly.
    Unforgivably take my precious gems I hide
    at no price.
    Label one side
    in sharpie, "fragile" they write.
    That is not who I am to be.
    Leave me out in the rain
    like I feel no pain.
    Place me under the stairs,
    as I gather dust
    and vermin call me home.
    That is not where I belong, you see.
    So easily, with no care,
    I am a forgotten love's letter,
    a picture of days better,
    a once cherished doll left alone.
    Only one moment in history,
    still yet a million dreams.




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      Good write, I like the way you write, I like your style, very poetic, as Im sure you have a grammer based thought, as for Im very limited on grammer and writes, think I pretty much wrote what I needed to, but thanks for shareing the write enjoyed it
    | Posted on 2013-02-01 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, i like this one.
    :)
    i love how smoothly is flows to me, I enjoy the
    'forgotten love's letter, a picture of days better, a once cherished doll left alone.'
    very nice
    | Posted on 2013-01-24 00:00:00 | by Morticus | [ Reply to This ]


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