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    dots Submission Name: Everything's Forgivendots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsEverything's Forgivendots
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    In this cataclysmic prison
    I envy what I Envision
    Slave to society
    Watching 5 hours daily of,
    Television
    When I was 5 I wanted
    To be a lawyer
    Now only the thought of it
    Keeps me wishing.

    I had to work with what
    I was given,
    Self-positive and driven
    And before alterations leave
    Families grieving
    I shake my enemies hand
    And tell them that
    Everything's forgiven.




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      That's an alteration not an altercations?
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      When reality meets our dreams, we dance. There is a tinge of sadness but it is taken over by steely unapologetic forward moving emotion. Makes life living 'puede aguantar,' as my mother used to say.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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