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    dots Submission Name: Distancedots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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                        The moon is a great chunk of coal
                        Sunk low and smoldering its way
                        Into oblivion. O' love
                        do you pity me not?

                        How will I survive the horrors of night
                        Without her beauty to sustain me?
                        The frigid stars are far above yet they
                        Have no grace without your leave to shine.

                        The cold cruelty of the world as I toss
                        In turvy topped sheets. I do envy
                        Those denied by you, they are not
                        Longing for just one glimpse of a lovers
                        Eyes to melt the ice that grows
                        On a soul

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      !!! This reminded me a little bit of one of Rilke's Duino Elegies, in fact, his first one --

    ''Oh and night: there is night, when a wind full of infinite space gnaws at our faces.
    Whom would it not remain for--that longed-after, mildly disillusioning presence,
    which the solitary heart so painfully meets.
    Is it any less difficult for lovers?
    But they keep on using each other to hide their own fate.''

    O love do you pity me not? How exquisitely painfully sincere...

    Very nicely done.
    | Posted on 2013-01-20 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]

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