Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: noon at long baydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/343/209
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 711
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1033



    Description:
       No comments. Please.
    Just an online journal dump.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsnoon at long baydots
    -------------------------------------------




    i am still a child, uncertain.
    pendulums, the way of shared
    and unbroken love.

    about me and this other me, fickle and undying,
    let them read of stones and leaves underneath
    the passing of strangers.

    how i come to this place, knowing there is only the quiet of my heart,
    the slipstream of bodies rushing into water, the press of sun my solitude,
    the scouring of sand my roots to this earth.

    i want this touch to last forever. i want this daylight to cover me
    with more than warmth, more than a glimmer of protection,
    an invocation of forgiveness and compassion.

    let these stars ignite, spinning in their seemingly perpetual ease,
    let them spin and burn and wonder at humanity, at the frailty
    of seeking without a vision, of consciousness

    without direction.

    ______________________________________________________________






    Submitted on 2013-01-17 11:12:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    196782

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    untitled written by MyPeriodical
    That Kind of Love Never Brought Me Flowers written by Jazzy
    Tired Vine written by MyPeriodical
    I am a sorry son. Part two written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Survive ed - right back at the beginning written by MyPeriodical
    Giant written by MyPeriodical
    Broken Promises written by S.A.M.
    Scared written by MyPeriodical
    Gone written by MyPeriodical
    Where is My Ghost written by ForgottenGraves
    written by Daniel Barlow
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Remedies written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Release written by robbie
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Leyenda de Un Maldito Cobarde written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    I am still sorry. written by MyPeriodical
    To Be written by MyPeriodical
    One day older, One year wiser. written by Rhythmal
    Instances written by hyproglo
    written by Daniel Barlow
    The First Time written by Wolfwatching
    Sanctimony written by MyPeriodical
    Silly Rulers. written by MyPeriodical
    written by Daniel Barlow
    untitled written by MyPeriodical

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry