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    dots Submission Name: Walkerdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 262/243/141
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 565
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       this is a repost im diggin through my old work for a compulation im working on


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    dotsWalkerdots
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    I walk
    Back and forth
    In front of the window
    each car is yours
    Till it isnít
    Each minute slinks out ashamed
    Not again
    Head lights light the black kitchen
    For a moment I am lighter too
    They go
    Leaving just the night
    I bite my thumb
    Till I taste metal
    I go through lies in my head
    I make them for you
    That is what I do
    Because I love you








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