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    dots Submission Name: What can I do but thank you 2dots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWhat can I do but thank you 2dots
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    How Your Silence deafens me.
    I strain my ears
    holding them close to my heart
    waiting for your still small voice.
    But your silence prevails.

    So I curl up in your silence
    I get as close to it as I can
    Oh You are the silence!
    A solid silence!
    An all pervading silence!
    A peace in the stillness
    of silence.
    Warmth and love
    come from embracing You.

    She taught me silence was rejection
    A weapon, a knife to wound with.
    A punishment, a removal of love.

    But you are here also.
    Faithful and true.
    Still holding me,
    sustaining me
    without words.

    Your all encompassing presence
    never leaves me or foresakes me.

    What can I do but thank you!




    Submitted on 2013-01-17 17:44:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "She" is my stepmother.
    | Posted on 2013-01-20 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      The theme is great and unique. I enjoyed comprehending your poem. Silence has a magical power and it conveys vehemently than words. I have a little confusion- who is She in the poem.

    Also thanks for going over my work.
    | Posted on 2013-01-20 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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