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    dots Submission Name: Ill Mind dots
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    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/35
    Words: 364
    Class/Type: Story/Angry
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    dotsIll Mind dots
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    Dreams of drums
    my heart filled with evil.
    My thoughts control me.
    murder all around.
    My dream plagues
    blood on my walls.
    guts on my bed. as I sleep peacefully.
    I hunt and pray for another victim.
    there paths across the wrong way.
    as they walk by, I sneak up and slice there necks.
    blood on the ground, heads in my hands.
    I dump the body behind a building.
    there heads next to by bed.
    I don't make since but nether does the world.
    My thoughts run me out. It has taken over me.
    I have no control. More bodies pile, while heads fill my bed.
    The site of blood is a sign of love.
    My first female is here. shes gone now.
    I only wonder what there family thinks.
    Are they happy that they are gone?
    Are they mad, outraged, or upset?
    I'm fucked up in the head. I have more to say.
    now I see my next victim, I plot what I shall do.
    he walks a lone in the park. no one around. I want to make him hurt. I want him to hurt like I do.
    Jump out behind him. tie him up. and take him home.
    I lie him on my bed. face down. cut him down his back. the blood flows like a crystal river.
    I see gold.
    I cut him down his arms, legs, and neck.
    I skin him alive.
    I back his back and watch him scream.
    I cut him up peace by peace.
    first the toes.
    his ankle.
    his calf. his knee.
    his leg is gone.
    His fingers.
    his hand.
    His wrist.
    You get the point.
    I have this feeling of satisfaction that I've never felt.
    I have completed the task. and now as I sit there while he screams, I drink a cup of his blood.
    Smoke a cigar. and listen to the beautiful music that people can create. Classical music rhymes with the terror. I sit there until he dies.





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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks brother
    | Posted on 2013-01-18 00:00:00 | by jjd | [ Reply to This ]
      Dark and gory, without reservation or apology. That's the way it should be done. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-18 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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