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    dots Submission Name: The Lynching of Professor Crawforddots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 368/381/224
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
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       Just a vent after watching Finding Forrester. That character, Robert Crawford just didn't sit well with me. Sean Connery played Mr. Forrester.


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    dotsThe Lynching of Professor Crawforddots
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    Join me, come on, people;
    stand up for what is right.
    Let us take our aspirations
    and put up a gallant fight!


    This Professor Crawford,
    let's keep him sitting down;
    his malicious onslaught
    against Jamal makes me frown.


    Let us help those in need,
    grow the seedlings of promise
    to always defend the weak:
    this our words and actions ever speak.






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      I feel sort of like a dummy. Like I've missed so huge historical current event on why we are lynching Professor Crawford. I don't get the reference. :/

    The last line I feel could be intensified so you can feel the tension and aggression building. I suggest something like, "of this let our words and actions speak." or "of this our words and actions must speak."

    It's a subtle change, but I think it could tie together the poem better.

    Just musing,
    --Carrie.
    | Posted on 2013-02-13 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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