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    dots Submission Name: Wake Updots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWake Updots
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    Pain is caused by acts of cruelty
    When one should love with loyalty
    but instead chooses to demean
    with an excuse of questionable equality.

    What is the definition of honesty?
    Is it to cruise around the lines and seams
    sew its on pockets, in better ability
    as a worker of its own trade
    unfit for society.

    What debts to be made
    when you cant even handle the majority
    but your choice still remains
    with claims of hypocrisy.

    Do you smile at the sun in the sky
    say how beautiful the scenery
    yet cant admit what you see?

    Do you say its a nice shade of gray
    surrounded in green?
    And the grass that grows
    a perfect hue of ivory.
    Like the opening scene of a mystery.

    Even the stubbornest knows
    the difference between dreams
    and reality.




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      Imagery is really solid... There is also a definite rhythm, and the ending works... I'd only tweak a few things, but I like it. Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by Jbills | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, Good write, alot of detail, liked where you were going with it, wish it could of been longer :) To me I think a dream is what your heart wants and wished for, but then the reality of it, its not even close to a dream, I do see the sun as its going down, Ill be icefishing and thats when the magic happens, sometimes, I do appreciate a sunset and sunrise, I catch the sunrise everymorning at work, I agree to love with loyalty, because without it we'd be pretty insecure, Anyways these are my thoughts on your write,

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    | Posted on 2013-01-23 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]


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