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    dots Submission Name: Seahorsedots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSeahorsedots
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    Look at this metal platter
    My head is served up on it
    Eyes blinded by the sun
    The consummate reflection
    Of so many skies
    When you were wondering,
    Are these real?

    They are, and you were swimming,
    And I was under water unafraid
    Water and me were one

    The grains between my fingers
    So well matched they traced
    The lines as well as any
    Gypsy-foreteller, but alack,
    Left whisperings of fate to
    Curl up on the wind
    To this seashore medley.




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