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Bedtime


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 28
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Bedtime



It’s time to sleep and I have
worked myself up to a state
of a bewildered withering
piano that's quite beside itself --

in afterthoughts.





Submitted on 2013-01-20 09:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it is time to curl into a ball
and forget a memory

the last time I slept
I learned to trust a dream...
| Posted on 2013-02-02 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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