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    dots Submission Name: Dead To Medots
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    Author: EmptyBox
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 76/64/31
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
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    dotsDead To Medots
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    Your effortless conversation with our waitress
    was the last nail in our coffin. You poured questions
    like she poured tea, and the 32 pens in her pocket
    that she used for writing poetry and lunch orders
    held your fascination in a way that my life never did.

    Fascination... that is the perfect word. A brief study
    in how to reanimate your mechanical eyes, how to
    produce a favorable response in your autonomous
    movements with the stimulus "I care, and I love you."
    I should have saved myself the heartache, bought
    an apron with pockets, and carried 32 pens.




    Submitted on 2013-01-20 11:12:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is one of those moments in ordinary course of life that you managed to capture. I like how you tell the story with simple words. This one really touched me. Thanks for this one graceful piece..
    | Posted on 2013-02-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow !!! I like where you went with this, I must say a very good way to express them lifes moments in time, you captured it so well with words, hope to hear more of your creative writes

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-01-25 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]


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