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Another night

Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 78
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Another night

Let me repeat myself,
into the lining of my bed
that throws off slumber -
my time in spasms
out of its own intent.

Let me repeat myself into
The early hours, their silver
Threads tied snuggly to
The bedposts – a dreamcather
Poured out.

This censored tightness
I roll off : wicks are burning
behind the eyelids ever so --
draw out the palm,
will you,
and snuff them out --

Submitted on 2013-01-20 14:30:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this write seems like some poetry I dont understand, I like it tho cause it has me reading it over and over trying to figure out whats on your mind what your writeing about, good job on the thoughts, sometimes I try my best to write thoughts that dont make no sense lol, I think poetry is a life of emoion and were all captured by it

| Posted on 2013-02-04 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you meant dream catcher in the second stanza fourth line. Other than that typo it was a very strong and well written poem. It has emotion, detail and welcomes the senses so overall this is really well done.
| Posted on 2013-01-26 00:00:00 | by ElspethRoseWolf | [ Reply to This ]

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