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    dots Submission Name: Another nightdots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAnother nightdots

    Let me repeat myself,
    into the lining of my bed
    that throws off slumber -
    my time in spasms
    out of its own intent.

    Let me repeat myself into
    The early hours, their silver
    Threads tied snuggly to
    The bedposts a dreamcather
    Poured out.

    This censored tightness
    I roll off : wicks are burning
    behind the eyelids ever so --
    draw out the palm,
    will you,
    and snuff them out --

    Submitted on 2013-01-20 14:30:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this write seems like some poetry I dont understand, I like it tho cause it has me reading it over and over trying to figure out whats on your mind what your writeing about, good job on the thoughts, sometimes I try my best to write thoughts that dont make no sense lol, I think poetry is a life of emoion and were all captured by it

    | Posted on 2013-02-04 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you meant dream catcher in the second stanza fourth line. Other than that typo it was a very strong and well written poem. It has emotion, detail and welcomes the senses so overall this is really well done.
    | Posted on 2013-01-26 00:00:00 | by ElspethRoseWolf | [ Reply to This ]

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