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    dots Submission Name: By Breath of Moondots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBy Breath of Moondots
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                             The moon is but a breath
                             of frost-stain
                             Somewhere
                             Far beyond my bedroom window-

                             I am

                             awake tonight with my eyes
                             grown weary contemplating
                             the deep violet
                             of unending void.

                             Between you and I

                             A coven of stars beyond counting
                             has gathered no doubt
                             to plot our doom.
                             While for now I am safe in earthly
                             abode, here where the sting of
                             conniving stars is only a tingle.

                             What of you my love?
                             Are you safe?

                             The malfeasance of morning
                             without you beside me is coming.
                             And morning woe
                             does not play second fiddle to any
                             mere coven of stars.




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      You have done a superb job here! I truly love the beauty with which you pain this piece. The imagery is astounding and the sense is heartfelt.

    There is a type of magic in this piece. An articulation of affection…answers that a special someone, alone, can answer. The deep rumens of the heart….

    well done!
    jp
    | Posted on 2013-04-24 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      I honestly teared up reading this. There is a power in your words that is so unattainable yet extremely relateable!
    Again your words have blown me away!

    Fana
    | Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      The picture is so clear to me. When you have questions like this there's no definite answer until you hear it from the other person. I think this is magical in the sense that at some point of our lives we have felt like this. This kind of longing, anticipation, love and a bit of sadness all summed up to this. Another outstanding moon poem from you is really a treat.

    "does not play second fiddle to any
    mere coven of stars. "..and I really like this line.


    Jen
    | Posted on 2013-01-20 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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