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    dots Submission Name: Motiondots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMotiondots
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    escapist notions
    stick, stuck to
    a life of my
    (your) choosing.

    is this a space that could
    be shifted so easily?
    walk from this room, this place
    To another familiar
    an anomaly in the
    absence of a new solidarity.

    How will it happen?
    is it a choice,
    is it my choice?
    a conscious decision
    the next move
    shifting perspectives—

    in my awareness remains:
    “i don’t know
    who you are anymore.”

    the path is on
    i see it bowing
    an echo of what
    came before me and
    what must be etched
    after me.
    the secret of my wavering
    known like written words
    stretched unwillingly against
    giving paper.




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      Tricks of the trade?
    | Posted on 2013-01-30 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the timing in this, I though this was a very cool piece. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-23 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]


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