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    dots Submission Name: Pristine dots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPristine dots
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    Fuck you and your
    beautiful smile, I hate the
    way you bend my heart
    and take away all control
    from my inner being to the
    depths of my soul, hate the
    way you make me so
    complete in meaning only
    to leave me bleeding out
    cries for help as you stand
    by idly smiling..

    I guess it's all a joke in the
    end when I'm not worth
    the time to mend by your
    hand or given a few
    sentences to understand
    the meaning of your
    words..

    Svw




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