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Sunset at bay


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Sunset at bay



It wasn't splashed on. Or even spray-painted exuberance
on the giant liquefied wall, it was
as if your breath was caught between
the looking glass, lit up
by a flickering candle.

I haven't seen the moon here - lest heart
should jump out and rejoice
at its feverish heartbroken twin:
from once upon a time
above a heaving ocean,
when air wove fiery loops
around flowers' necks,
tighten them and finally -
watch charcoal petals fall
at our oblivious feet.




Submitted on 2013-01-26 10:06:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great imagery here very descriptive and subtle. I like the opening lines. Sometimes when I read poems I stopped immediately at the first two lines because I already know where it is heading. In this piece you made a clear invitation from the very beginning. It made me really curious. It is one of the qualities I find fascinating in poetry that it draws you in. You delivered quite well. Thanks for sharing.
| Posted on 2013-02-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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