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    dots Submission Name: Surrender to Silencedots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSurrender to Silencedots
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    I had a speech all knitted together
    til you tugged the end
    and it all unravelled.
    Now I lie
    my listening ear
    against my heart,
    resting in your Peace.

    I am at the feet of Love.

    You breathe me.

    I have come to trust
    that in this time of hush
    you are at work.
    The skill of the Master
    will create a master piece.

    In the hands of the sculptor
    it is often the clay
    that is carved away
    from which the beautiful image
    comes forth.

    It is in the effort of the peeling
    that the sweetness of the fruit
    is revealed.

    The fragrance of the rose
    is released during
    the unfurling of the petals.

    Lie calm and quiet
    and I shall
    pull all the thorns from your soul.

    I relax into your stillness
    and surrender to Silence.




    Submitted on 2013-01-26 16:30:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good, but I'd get rid of the 3 stanzas about the clay, fruit and rose; you don't need them. They're nice but redundant.
    | Posted on 2013-01-27 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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