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    dots Submission Name: Love Unconditionaldots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 754
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    dotsLove Unconditionaldots
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    Obsession within reason,
    never-changing through the seasons.
    Regressions withhold meaning.
    Oh How doubts can be deceiving,
    but trust, it is relieving.

    Love, unconditional
    No hidden doors to break through.
    No shadows that can harm you,
    just a warm embrace that calms you.

    Love, unconditional
    Oh how hard it is to find you.
    A drug so needed
    blinds everything you do.
    Hearts defeated
    underlying something so new.

    It builds you up
    Breaks you down
    Makes you fly
    Then fall flat on the ground

    So soft, you barely make
    a sound.

    But it catches you so,
    you want some more,
    the hurt is so worthwhile.

    Love, unconditional
    No hidden doors to break through
    No shadows that can harm you
    Just a warm embrace that calms you.

    Love, unconditional
    Oh how badly that I need you.
    Clenching at my soul.
    It grows and grows..

    The want.
    The urge.
    The pain.
    The burn.

    Im going through withdrawals,
    convulsing at the thought,
    that Ill never find you.

    Love, unconditional
    No hidden doors to break through
    No shadows that can harm you
    Just a warm embrace that calms you.

    Love, unconditional
    Im desperately searching for you.
    Made a promise to myself,
    that I will find you.
    If its the last thing that I do.




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      Unconditional love just doesn't happen between lovers. That's my nitpick. As a mother, I love my kids so deeply, profoundly, unconditionally, that I realize that every love shared between myself and another pales and could never measure up.

    Don't get me wrong, it's fantastic work. It flows easily, it has just the right amount of spunk, it evokes the right images and feelings...but, speaking out of my own experience, it's naive.

    You must be a strong woman, to face the fall and heartache so easily.

    Snaps for this piece,
    --Carrie.
    | Posted on 2013-02-13 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
      Holy fuck !!! I love it I like where your minds at on this write, longing right, I know how that feels, Iam longing for the same as well just never found what Im looking for, I spend my days working then working out at the gym Im around my family 24/7, thats my life in a nutshell, everyday and week is pretty much the same, Iam native american, so I do believe in my indian ways and am very spiritial, keeps me strong, but anyways enough about me, I would like to hear more from you, and bravo on this write I like it
    | Posted on 2013-01-30 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]


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