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    dots Submission Name: My Lyrical Affairdots
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    Author: longwinterdays
    ASL Info:    21/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204/190/64
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    Description:
       Based off of how I felt after a conversation with my "lyrical affair". Her words spoke hope into this dried up soul.


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    dotsMy Lyrical Affairdots
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    You said,
    "Let's go out to the water's edge.
    Watch our words float upon the waves"
    The words-
    They don't need the ocean to flow away.
    They already float.
    Float in my head.
    In my heart.
    Through my soul.
    and they float in my veins.

    I feel every word.
    every syllable.
    as the beating of my heart.

    Your beauty captivates me,
    ALWAYS.
    You leave me breathless.
    Your soul does something,
    AMAZING.

    Your breath upon my neck as we dance,
    it creates a new beat.

    You tell me that I hold the glass slipper.
    that there is no other.
    Time wasn't on our side,
    and the tears of my soul
    they tell me that there is no way
    no way to stop the clocks,
    turn back the hands of time.
    I'm sorry for the beauty our words,
    together, create.
    If it weren't for the beauty,
    time wouldn't be an issue.

    your words speak life into me,
    a life I could never even fathom,
    not even in my dreams.

    captivation.
    beauty.
    words.
    glass slippers.




    Submitted on 2013-01-29 00:47:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Quite sensual, thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-02-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Isn't it something, to create a piece of writing which constitutes the depth of passion, your 'captivation'? And isn't it true, that were time infinite, and age regardless, the sincerity of a few simple words such as 'I love you' would mean nothing? Yet, as this piece of writing clearly defines in few choice words, time is impractically impatient, even in the midst of the most perfect union.

    I believe the capitalized words midway through insinuate your purpose, your summary lines at the end of the poem speak simply, yet directly, and the storyline from start to finish creates an indirect relation with those in your audience who have felt time slip away from something perfect of their own. I thought this was well-written, Dre.

    -Tony
    | Posted on 2013-01-30 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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