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    dots Submission Name: Surelydots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSurelydots
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    What if you were to come tomorrow,
    Surely I would spot you across the seething
    Glass emptiness, reach for your tired
    Face and bury my head in your neck,
    And surely the silence between us
    Would drop amidst the bygones
    Floating in this chalice
    Fluttering to the falling sand
    That has been
    Since.
    And surely the creaks of the opened doors
    And shutters would be a welcome relief
    as when the sheets are thrown off
    and the shafts of light claim
    the settling dust.
    And surely, surely --
    This folly --
    Oh how it hurts to breathe
    Before the plexus strikes
    a thousand ice shards
    through the nerves
    in waiting
    Surely! --

    I drift

    with my face upwards - -




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      I get lots of nice images, trapped in glass, time, sand, light hitting dust, it conjures up a story within an hour glass, hidden, like hidden pain, then the light hits the falling sand and makes you feel that surely one day you might understand..

    Last stanza lost me a bit, felt less powerful than the rest, perhaps not in imagery but originality, overall I enjoyed it, could associate with it quite well.
    | Posted on 2013-02-05 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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