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    dots Submission Name: easy murder dots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotseasy murder dots

    I am the relapse of release, the ever present tension pulling your eyes asunder inwards to every joint and crease pulled and frayed by regret.

    I am the pain becoming fixated
    I am the razor you cannot see, the true self you are forever hiding from, the mask you put on fragile mindsets, the cover you cannot shake when faced with sunsets.

    I am nothing more than your former self crying out to stop for just one moment and look back at all you forgot.

    I am the moment the tear hits the page to become an ink blot, another memory to be forgotten, or not..


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      "Of what do I consist?" .... seems to be a major theme of your poetry.

    This one seems to outline a single solution for a single situation. But ... is it a mistake to express a hunger by speculating in philosophy?

    It's not just you, but some famous dead poets who also make me ask this question. Probably has no answer!
    | Posted on 2013-02-05 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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