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    dots Submission Name: I knowdots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsI knowdots

    I know your weakness, your every thought and plan for success,
    I know how to take away from you something that cannot be repaid with forgiveness.
    I understand your deepest synapses formed, I know how to twist them so you are destroyed.

    I still remember your skin, memories of how things began,
    I still carry your smile like a poisoned scythe in my head,
    begging to cut you down.

    You left spite and malice behind to contend with loneliness which will plunge a fist into me first, yet here I sit fighting the demons begging me to ruin you so badly.

    If only I hadn't loved you so madly.


    Submitted on 2013-01-30 12:02:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was enjoyable in its darkness. I can relate to the struggle of loving one so madly. I like how you used dark sayings in this piece to describe those thoughts. It rings out to me and leaves me wondering if you will strip this lover of the strengths this person has. You list off your knowledge of this person. Which is why I say that.

    so what says you? are you going to give into the demons?
    | Posted on 2013-02-02 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]
      oh this is so heartbreackingly beautiful. For me it really starts to pick up, this mad craving for revenge.' The poisoned scythe', ' fist into me first' and the final rhyme - so full of of angry resentment, desperation.! I love it.
    | Posted on 2013-01-31 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]

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