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    dots Submission Name: Dear Lovedots
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    Author: dryken
    ASL Info:    30/m/OH
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 24/23/28
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDear Lovedots
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    The shady darkness of life veils before me. Your smiling visage is all I see.
    The beauty of an angel that stands before me.
    Skin like ebony silk.
    Eyes that hold the depths of the universe.
    But yet I see no love for me there.
    My heart cries such tears that stain my soul.
    What have I become, again I am a hollow of a man.
    Who again has loved in vain.
    I miss you dear love
    A name that angels sing
    One that echoes the essence of heaven.
    For there is no greater love then what has befallen me.
    Love........ I can still hear the song of your heart faintly on the wind.
    As I wonder slowly in the darkness again alone




    Submitted on 2013-01-30 21:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow first of all I gotta say, good fucken job on the write, you used your minds thoughts very well on this and captured all, the sweetness of love is a burden to a heart, Dude I fucken love the write man, good job keep it up and God bless man God bless

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-02-04 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe instead of all the periods after 'love', use a hyphen/dash?
    | Posted on 2013-02-02 00:00:00 | by Amadan | [ Reply to This ]


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