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Dear Love


Author: dryken
ASL Info:    30/m/OH
Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 24 /23 /28
Words: 124
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Dear Love



The shady darkness of life veils before me. Your smiling visage is all I see.
The beauty of an angel that stands before me.
Skin like ebony silk.
Eyes that hold the depths of the universe.
But yet I see no love for me there.
My heart cries such tears that stain my soul.
What have I become, again I am a hollow of a man.
Who again has loved in vain.
I miss you dear love
A name that angels sing
One that echoes the essence of heaven.
For there is no greater love then what has befallen me.
Love........ I can still hear the song of your heart faintly on the wind.
As I wonder slowly in the darkness again alone




Submitted on 2013-01-30 21:14:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow first of all I gotta say, good fucken job on the write, you used your minds thoughts very well on this and captured all, the sweetness of love is a burden to a heart, Dude I fucken love the write man, good job keep it up and God bless man God bless

theinforment
| Posted on 2013-02-04 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
  Maybe instead of all the periods after 'love', use a hyphen/dash?
| Posted on 2013-02-02 00:00:00 | by Amadan | [ Reply to This ]


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