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    dots Submission Name: Had A Bad Daydots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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       I don't like it when people take out their bad days on me. Control yourselves.


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    dotsHad A Bad Daydots
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    You stepped in dog crap?
    Oh man, I'm so sorry.
    Coach made you do an extra lap?
    That sucks, I feel you.
    Got of the wrong side of the bed?
    Don't worry, it'll be fine.
    Hammers pounding in your head?
    Let me take care of you.
    ...
    Why am I doing everything wrong?
    I'm not, you just had a bad day.
    You don't feel like you belong?
    I'm not acting any different.
    I used up all the tissues?
    No I didn't, you used the last of them.
    What exactly is my issue?
    You know what, you are. I'm done.




    Submitted on 2013-02-01 20:27:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha! How bitterly perfect!
    It got a bit muddled, a bit mind you, but so spot-on.

    Flip 'em off, Honey, and don't look back. :)
    --Carrie
    | Posted on 2013-02-13 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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