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    dots Submission Name: A conditiondots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I miss the days when every smoke ring became an angel following each sweet inhale,
    now I just see visions of your face burning in hell.
    I feel no remorse,
    you brought this upon yourself, your own actions spiral you downward.

    I'm not a hateful man, just a lost wanderer expecting too much from a broken world,
    chasing after the perfect rush of perfection to cleanse my soul's orifices of afflictions, just an expression of life slowly becoming dust.

    Svw




    Submitted on 2013-02-03 15:23:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really good piece. I can't really explain why I like it so much, but I do.

    My favorite part is "I'm not a hateful man, just a lost wanderer expecting too much from a broken world"... My friends call me a dreamer. Sometimes they think that I am being hateful because things don't go the way I planned, but honestly it's more of me just hoping that this broken world will step the heck up and do something good... something right.

    this piece spoke to me.
    | Posted on 2013-02-04 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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