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the wilds

Author: scardnscared
ASL Info:    25/ DFW
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Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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the wilds

into the wild I went
without a second thought or regret
and as the sun set on that first day
I didn't cry, just sweat
for the heat was something I wasn't used to yet.

who was to know
that this would be soon become an oasis
and even though they said
you would as soon see a mirage then an ocean.

the springs come sooner here
and winter barely exists
but its ok I guess
for I have traded snow for bliss.

and don't close your eyes on the sky
because its completely different this time
the blues and the reds are all mixed up in my head
so don't mind if I just smile.

who could say what happened that day
but my bags were packed and they were calling my name
I couldn't wave good bye
because they had already driven away.

well years have passed
and im not ashamed too say
not amount of money
could make me leave this place.

Submitted on 2013-02-05 16:35:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really liked the formatt and it was lyrical almost musical I could visulize what you saw . it reminded me of a nice warm place not this freazing cold place im in.
| Posted on 2013-02-22 00:00:00 | by serenitysuicide | [ Reply to This ]

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