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    dots Submission Name: the wildsdots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe wildsdots
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    into the wild I went
    without a second thought or regret
    and as the sun set on that first day
    I didn't cry, just sweat
    for the heat was something I wasn't used to yet.

    who was to know
    that this would be soon become an oasis
    and even though they said
    you would as soon see a mirage then an ocean.

    the springs come sooner here
    and winter barely exists
    but its ok I guess
    for I have traded snow for bliss.

    and don't close your eyes on the sky
    because its completely different this time
    the blues and the reds are all mixed up in my head
    so don't mind if I just smile.

    who could say what happened that day
    but my bags were packed and they were calling my name
    I couldn't wave good bye
    because they had already driven away.

    well years have passed
    and im not ashamed too say
    not amount of money
    could make me leave this place.




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      i really liked the formatt and it was lyrical almost musical I could visulize what you saw . it reminded me of a nice warm place not this freazing cold place im in.
    | Posted on 2013-02-22 00:00:00 | by serenitysuicide | [ Reply to This ]


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