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    dots Submission Name: Can't Hold Backdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       Just wanted to hear some feedback on bipolar issues, or split personality disorder.


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    dotsCan't Hold Backdots
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    I've lost my temper
    Several times now
    It falls hard like an anchor
    My anger goes beyond
    A frown above the eyebrow.

    Just a few days ago
    I almost killed a man
    Not the way you picture it
    Though
    I hurt his pride
    Yet I wanted to destroy
    Him with my bare hands.

    In my culture bipolar issues
    Are constantly disregarded
    but always there to trap
    I've been diagnosed with it
    Now the problem got worse
    To the point that I act upon things
    and I can't hold back.




    Submitted on 2013-02-06 20:51:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dont worrie mate happens to the best of us, but its what u get out of it what you learn, anger can either be a good thing or a bad thing, hopefully its a good thing for you so you can learn from it, not to treat people like that, think of God or what ever you believe in, and pray become a better man use your faluts to be better at life, dont look down on them, IDK man thats what I had to say about your write dont know if its a proper comment or not but those are my thoughts on it, well my friend take it easy and enjoy life love your family

    theinforment
    | Posted on 2013-02-12 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]


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