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    dots Submission Name: Red Ravendots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsRed Ravendots
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                                       Raven
                                       Blood
                                       Raven
                                       when you
                                       come out to play
                                       even the boogie men
                                       become
                                       run-a-ways.

                                            With
                                            A flutter of blades
                                            Your sweetest
                                            dreams are made.

                                       Heart of a hellion
                                       bleeding bright
                                       You dance in shadow
                                       Cast
                                       By
                                       Candlelight.

                                            Umber eyes glow
                                            While
                                            Wicked
                                            Within you grows


                                       You sold your soul
                                       For a sordid sum.
                                       Now you know
                                       Where the black cats
                                       Go at midnight.


                                            Just a nice girl
                                            In a nasty mood?
                                            No
                                            A lost girl
                                            With an attitude.

                                       A symphony in topsy turvy time
                                       You have gone beyond
                                       The waking
                                       Beyond the opiate dream
                                       You have become one
                                            With
                                            The undone









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      A lost girl with an attitude.... :) Love your insight. Love the poem. Bet you're fun...
    | Posted on 2013-03-24 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Blue Monk is right, your best verse is about godesses. (But he is wrong in spelling them with a double D and so is the dumb spellcheck, if anybody cares.). I was just now reading back through your poems here, after being snarky about the latest one. Well, I think you have two KINDS of poems to write ... that is my real comment, I guess. But they are both about love.
    | Posted on 2013-02-24 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I love poems about women and goddesses. This seems to tread between the two. Nothing more exciting than a dangerous dame. I'd like to see that dance, wouldn't you?

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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