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    dots Submission Name: From Cover to Coverdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsFrom Cover to Coverdots
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                             rustling pages slowing turned
                             with catch of breath as I yearn
                             to burn with you
                             in stellar sky

                             enchanted
                             flight

                             on lifting wind
                             lofted until I
                             touch the cheek of Venus
                             and steal a kiss

                             a breath of light

                             for a moment held
                             bestows the fallow sea
                             with life

                             limpid pools of dreams
                             romantic whims
                             bare skin
                             we drink of dew filtered pure
                             and cherish one another
                             with innocent
                             wonder




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is great Dale. I especially like the last verse. I really like this new direction you've been taking. A lot less sordid inescapable trollwood horrendous, a lot more human emotion that makes me feel hopeful and fit!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-02-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      There we go again with the goddess thing. I have a weakness there, and here you cast a dream net. Thanks!

    Lloyd
    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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