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Hopeful Solitude

Author: krs3332003
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This is a story about how even Love can be deceived. They say Love conquers all, but I truly wonder if that's the case. Sometimes, I think, she needs a little help...

Hopeful Solitude

In the world of icy dreams
an endless nightmare grows
Through plains of frozen sanity
it weaves its song of woes

A lullaby of sweet content
that takes the Warmth once bound
It fills her soul with iciness
and sends her dancing 'round

Spiraling through the evermore
with empty thoughts so pale
Lost amongst the snowy ebbs
Love wears a lonesome veil

Angels weep from distant clouds
they pray for her return
Further through the wilderness
she laughs at their concern

Enchantments cast to sway the spell
to break phantasm's chill
Chasing through the twilight fields
they kiss her heartless will

A shield of sorrow sends them back
through halls of crystal white
Love cares nothing of the past
but trembles at the sight

A streaming ray of Hope
from some unseen memory
Gently so she notices
this timeless entity

She gazes into eyes of fire
that melts away the grief
A sword of truth to set her free
and blind the soulless thief

Taken in and banished back
the nightmare ends its reign
Love returns her gift to all
forever to remain

Submitted on 2013-02-10 11:14:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I've gotta agree with Blue Monk there, but I'm definitely gonna sugar-coat the pastry a bit more.
I loved, loved, LOVED the rhythm of this - almost dream-like, sorta like a fantasy. I could almost feel the chill and cool rush of attraction, probably just because of how it's written.
But, yeah, some details here and there could throw the reader off...though, perhaps it's selective.
| Posted on 2014-10-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  Very classy sounding, and like I commented on Dale's pieces, I like poetry about women and goddesses in particular. The use of "frozen" twice in the first stanza threw me off a little, but this has a nice roll to it. I also like happy endings.

| Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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