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    dots Submission Name: Hopeful Solitudedots

    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 145/114/65
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       This is a story about how even Love can be deceived. They say Love conquers all, but I truly wonder if that's the case. Sometimes, I think, she needs a little help...

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    dotsHopeful Solitudedots

    In the world of icy dreams
    an endless nightmare grows
    Through plains of frozen sanity
    it weaves its song of woes

    A lullaby of sweet content
    that takes the Warmth once bound
    It fills her soul with iciness
    and sends her dancing 'round

    Spiraling through the evermore
    with empty thoughts so pale
    Lost amongst the snowy ebbs
    Love wears a lonesome veil

    Angels weep from distant clouds
    they pray for her return
    Further through the wilderness
    she laughs at their concern

    Enchantments cast to sway the spell
    to break phantasm's chill
    Chasing through the twilight fields
    they kiss her heartless will

    A shield of sorrow sends them back
    through halls of crystal white
    Love cares nothing of the past
    but trembles at the sight

    A streaming ray of Hope
    from some unseen memory
    Gently so she notices
    this timeless entity

    She gazes into eyes of fire
    that melts away the grief
    A sword of truth to set her free
    and blind the soulless thief

    Taken in and banished back
    the nightmare ends its reign
    Love returns her gift to all
    forever to remain

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    ||| Comments |||
      I've gotta agree with Blue Monk there, but I'm definitely gonna sugar-coat the pastry a bit more.
    I loved, loved, LOVED the rhythm of this - almost dream-like, sorta like a fantasy. I could almost feel the chill and cool rush of attraction, probably just because of how it's written.
    But, yeah, some details here and there could throw the reader off...though, perhaps it's selective.
    | Posted on 2014-10-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Very classy sounding, and like I commented on Dale's pieces, I like poetry about women and goddesses in particular. The use of "frozen" twice in the first stanza threw me off a little, but this has a nice roll to it. I also like happy endings.

    | Posted on 2013-02-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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