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    dots Submission Name: Gone from heredots

    Author: EragonaElven
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 6/4/4
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Prose/Death
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    dotsGone from heredots

    Gone from here, Gone from here.
    Leaving me behind.
    Why did you leave, I saw you just hours before.
    Why did you leave.
    Gone from here, Gone from here.
    Leaving me behind.

    Don't leave me, please don't.
    I'm lost without you, my life in tatters.
    Don't, I beg of you, Don't leave me.

    I called, you did not answer, no light to greet me.
    I found you, unconscious, laying there.
    The smell of blood in the air.
    I called, you did not answer, no light to greet me.

    They did not let me see you, did not let me see you.
    Father called brother from lady love.
    They did not let me see you, did not let me see you.

    Gone from here, gone from here.
    Leaving me behind.
    Saw you one last time hours before, but now
    your gone.
    Gone from here, Gone from here.
    Leaving me behind.

    Submitted on 2013-02-15 19:51:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reading this piece brought a tear in my eye. you can really hear the outpouring of intense grief and loss in this piece, and how even though you know there are people there for you, it doesn't make it any less painful to deal with. but you don't have to go through it alone, young one. keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-02-19 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]

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